rate_review Reviews

gosh...you might have something good here but it's hard to tell as it's very difficult to read. if you would add paragraph breaks it would be easier on the reader's eye. also, i suggest you use your spell-checker and/or get a beta to look over your story before you post it.

kudos to you for getting out there and writing--if you make it a little more reader-friendly, i foresee good reviews in your future!

Too many mechanical errors, and the people are, um... just a BIT OOC.

OK, so tell me do you know JOJO, again with the jumbled story that really hurts to read....get yourself a proper beta...

I'm sorry, I can't get past the idea of Buffy not being able to lay Angel out with a couple of well-timed punches. Or is she not the Slayer in this "story"?