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for After Cleveland

by ShyBob

person Doug
schedule July 6, 2003 at 12:00 AM
Okay, this was nice. I young "Hitwoman"? Yeah, they're out and about in this world. But I thought that Matty should have shone a little more disbelief. Try doing a third or fourth chapter, and show us how would Dawn move about in Mattys' circles. Maybe develope something nasty they can both go after, and then perhaps take them out into the world. I did like this, but please, a little more. Begging never hurts.....right?