Chapter 10: some actual plot development! Interesting. :)
Lol. I did ask for more Xander in this story. Wasn't expecting a spitroast between Faith & Anya. Pretty entertaining never the less. And having his nut sent out for Buffy. This is a rather dark and amusing fic.
The Watchers are planning to flat line girls till they have a simi army of Slayers? Well, amoral, but not exactly a bad idea. Can't wait to read more. See where you go from here. Amanda, is the PTS from s7 right?
Glad to see an update. Buffy getting owned by Faith is entertaining enough. Curious what you have planned for the others. Both Xander & Giles have 'evil' personalities locked away, maybe you could do a spell and let them out to play?
Add insult to injury and have them use Buffy, or Dawny, or any of the other girls waiting to be rescued.
Nice, I didn't think you could personalize something as dirty as the Dawn picture show, but Tara the toliet was a stroak of brilliance. Can't wait to read more. Curious if we'll see Xander or Oz out of their box.
Chapter 6: short but sweet. Nice lil bit of smut.
Nice. I'm always a fan of degrading little Dawny. But there doesn't seem to be a lot of use for Xander or Giles. Is there a chance we'll see more of them? Maybe debasing Buffy together, or any number of other female scoobies?
Or Faith using them to knock up some of them, its one kink I haven't seen displayed here. Nice work so far.
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I really hope you haven't been discouraged by reviews to write more of this. Reviews express opinions and you should write what you like. It's still a fine story very much worthy of continuing.
Though I'm all for gang banging Joye I have to admit the 'lesser known' characters didn't really seem necessary, more like clutter. Though quite enjoyable, I think I'd have like it better with just Darla and Dru.
Looking forward to seeing where you take it next.
Very kinky
Nice work
Not sure if it's a good idea to introduce so many obscure characters at this point unless they all somehow turn out to be important for the plot.
I think the chapter would've been better if it had just been Joyce being used by Darla, Druscilla and Lilah--and no others. This would've made it easier to focus more on the smut (Joyce being lesbian gangbanged and then Buffy and Dawn starring in a lesbian incestuous homevideo for them to watch) part of the story instead of wasting time and energy writing dialogue and story for characters that almost nobody cares about.
The twisted video message that Buffy and Dawn were forced to star in held a huge amount of kinky smutty potential, but turned out way too short and underwritten. Which is a shame because it could've been the best part of this entire story.
The fact that this chapter was much harder to write for you might've been a mental warning that you were heading in a wrong direction with it.
This wasn't a bad chapter per se but previous chapters were smuttier and more enjoyable IMO.
Still looking forward to the next chapter.