Very interesting idea and liking both it and the earlier version a lot. Get the feeling the powers behind this aren't going to let Xander get home any time soon however.
My, oh my. Thats very interesting. Still curious on whos the villian. But that was a hot ending. Can't wait to read more.
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Chapter 24: Damn! That was one helluva chapter.
Wonderfully kinky sexy scenes with Buffy making Dawn clean Xander's cum from her asshole, Wilow & Tara dominating Dawn, and finally Buffy 'made airtight' by Xander, Tara and Willow.
Great stuff.
Knew it. Fucking knew it was Andrew
Always nice to read more of this.
I did notice an error in chapter 19 with the Mojo points around the time that Xander wants to do something about Tara's stress level. First it says that he has 33 Mojo left (but it's supposed to be 43), then after raising his money stats, the "Committed" action with Tara costs 43 Mojo, but next it says "33 Mojo worked out perfectly", so I guess that supposed to be right number. :)
Chapters 17/18: Nice to see more of this story. Another fun read.
And everytime I read another chapter of this, I'm reminded of just how much I'd like to play this as a game. :p
Chapter 15/16: Good chapters. I'm glad there was no snarky commentary from the computer this time.
Awesome chapter, I really like how much of a taste for cum Buffy has gained. Wonder if this will affect her birthdays at all.
I kinda prefered the first version, I think. Xander seemed to play a bit better there. Although I do like the more dominant/take charge Willow in this version. And her paddling Buffy was really hot.
But I really don't like the computer suddenly making snarky comments and working against Xander. The neutral computer version of this first story version is how it's supposed to be in a "game" like this.
Excellent story, a big improvement on the original. The DM being against him is a bit jarring but I love the rest of it.