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for City of Lost Angels

by LL72

person Oric13
schedule June 27, 2014 at 12:00 AM
Chapter 6: Another good chapter. Dawn dominating & whipping a mind warped Faith was damn hot.
It would be good if you'd beta read before posting because I do encounter a few grammar & continuity errors now and again.
Like this one: the crop crashed down again. A third loud scream filled the room.

"Go lower as well, on her thighs," said Franco.

Dawn nodded and did as she was told, the fourth caning cracking just below the buttocks

You switch from crop to cane, then to crop again, then back to cane, before finally returning to crop.
Better pick a punishment tool and stick with it. ;)

I do actually hope that Buffy gets to watch this DVD. :)
person Anon
schedule June 13, 2014 at 12:00 AM
That's definitely more like it. It could only be bettered by a Willow/Dawn/Buffy.
I agree with Oric, not interested in the generic pairings. In fact, I would have to say that the story of Buffy's relationship with Dawn is more interesting than the 'slayer' story - I'm still hoping for some sistercest.
person Oric13
schedule June 12, 2014 at 12:00 AM
Chapter 5: Good chapter. I especially enjoyed the Willow/Dawn/Cordy threesome. The sex scenes are a lot more interesting when they feature main characters instead of some OC porn stars.
person Oric13
schedule May 30, 2014 at 12:00 AM
Weirdly enough, the plot is a lot more exciting than the porn.
Really enjoyed the Giles/Buffy and the Amy/Faith scenes, couldn't have cared less about Dawn & Joyce having meaningless sex with some extras.
person Anon
schedule May 18, 2014 at 12:00 AM
Why does everyone always kill faith? Scene was damn hot but then...once again faith was killed
person echo
schedule May 8, 2014 at 12:00 AM
Quite hot. Can't for Buffy to fuck Willow.
person samsbk
schedule May 3, 2014 at 12:00 AM
Hey, can Xander get any love here? It seems everyone and there mother gets to pound Cordelia but poor Xander is left out in the cold.
person Oric13
schedule April 18, 2014 at 12:00 AM
Solid first chapter and some good sex scenes.
Though strangely enough I was much more interested in the non-sex Buffy/Sunnydale stuff than Dawn/Cordelia's porn career.