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April 28, 2017 at 12:00 AM
Pretty please let this story not be discontinued. I would love for a happy ending or at a fucked up dark happy ending that still involves Buffy and faith alive and still together
please
this story is amazing
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November 27, 2012 at 12:00 AM
Wow! Great story, keep it comin!
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October 11, 2012 at 12:00 AM
sick, you should see a shrink, before you kill someone
better yet kill yourself, you sick fuck
better yet kill yourself, you sick fuck
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July 1, 2012 at 12:00 AM
Chapter 5: Nicely done. You did a great job at capturing Buffy's voice, which is even harder to do ('cause less distinct) than Faith's.
I personally would've liked to see a bit more kinky sex scenes, like Faith slowly "taming" Buffy as the blonde gradually becomes more submissive and eventually surrenders to the dark slayer.
It seemed to go a bit too fast in this chapter with Buffy getting wet right away after that brutal spanking, and also in the other scenes she seemed a bit too accepting of her fate too fast.
Still a good chapter, though.
I personally would've liked to see a bit more kinky sex scenes, like Faith slowly "taming" Buffy as the blonde gradually becomes more submissive and eventually surrenders to the dark slayer.
It seemed to go a bit too fast in this chapter with Buffy getting wet right away after that brutal spanking, and also in the other scenes she seemed a bit too accepting of her fate too fast.
Still a good chapter, though.
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June 16, 2012 at 12:00 AM
absolutely loving this story, but any chance we could get a few more flashbacks detailing the last several years buffy has spent with faith?
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June 16, 2012 at 12:00 AM
Chapter 4: That... was pretty fucking angsty.
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June 9, 2012 at 12:00 AM
Chapter 3 REVISED: A bit too short to be called a chapter, really. It's like 2 pages! But in terms of quality of writing, I do think it is better than the previous chapter 3.
The mayor is acting nicely in character. I liked the bit of him fixating on his vampire flunky's crooked tie--good character moment.
And the bit with Buffy busy contemplating in front of the mirror was also pretty good, so I'm not surprised you kept that.
It did seem a tad rushed, though.
I understand that you weren't happy with this chapter and wanted to correct it quickly, but perhaps a better option would've been to simply delete it and then taking a bit more time writing the revised version.
Because I still felt like it doesn't quite match the quality of the first two chapters (perhaps because there's not enough to make it feel like a chapter).
The mayor is acting nicely in character. I liked the bit of him fixating on his vampire flunky's crooked tie--good character moment.
And the bit with Buffy busy contemplating in front of the mirror was also pretty good, so I'm not surprised you kept that.
It did seem a tad rushed, though.
I understand that you weren't happy with this chapter and wanted to correct it quickly, but perhaps a better option would've been to simply delete it and then taking a bit more time writing the revised version.
Because I still felt like it doesn't quite match the quality of the first two chapters (perhaps because there's not enough to make it feel like a chapter).
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June 6, 2012 at 12:00 AM
Not bad, not bad at all, any chance of a prequel to show how it all began and buffy's progression into her current state?
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June 6, 2012 at 12:00 AM
Chapter 2: Whoa, you waste very little time in raising the stakes.
I was actually feeling a bit squeamish when Faith started writing her name on Buffy and I'd probably would've preferred a humiliating tattoo on top of her tits or perhaps Faith branding her name into one of B's butt-cheeks, like cattle. But I have to admit that knife play suits Faith, and it was all very much in-character.
I really love the twisted love-hate relationship between these two.
And now the mayor suddenly needs the heart of a slayer?
Well, that's gonna cause some problems between him and his number one girl.
I was actually feeling a bit squeamish when Faith started writing her name on Buffy and I'd probably would've preferred a humiliating tattoo on top of her tits or perhaps Faith branding her name into one of B's butt-cheeks, like cattle. But I have to admit that knife play suits Faith, and it was all very much in-character.
I really love the twisted love-hate relationship between these two.
And now the mayor suddenly needs the heart of a slayer?
Well, that's gonna cause some problems between him and his number one girl.
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June 4, 2012 at 12:00 AM
Wow! Great story and an excellent start.
You do a good job of introducing us to this reality, with Faith arriving home from one of the "jobs" she pulled for the mayor, and with those other details of her new life your sprinkle throughout the story.
Even more impressive, you do a great job at writing Faith's voice, which is a hard one. I know because I've written a couple of stories from Faith's POV myself and I noticed that in one of those stories I often make the mistake of gradually slipping back into my own writer's voice instead of describing things like Faith would.
Another thing I really like is how you write Buffy. There are several other "tamed" Buffy stories on this site, but they often make the mistake of having Buffy's taming happen in like a heartbeat (or at least much too fast), even though one of the defining characteristics is Buffy's powerful spirit. So taming her should be a hard and difficult process. Ten years sounds about right ;)
Anyhow, I'm looking forward to reading more of this story.
You do a good job of introducing us to this reality, with Faith arriving home from one of the "jobs" she pulled for the mayor, and with those other details of her new life your sprinkle throughout the story.
Even more impressive, you do a great job at writing Faith's voice, which is a hard one. I know because I've written a couple of stories from Faith's POV myself and I noticed that in one of those stories I often make the mistake of gradually slipping back into my own writer's voice instead of describing things like Faith would.
Another thing I really like is how you write Buffy. There are several other "tamed" Buffy stories on this site, but they often make the mistake of having Buffy's taming happen in like a heartbeat (or at least much too fast), even though one of the defining characteristics is Buffy's powerful spirit. So taming her should be a hard and difficult process. Ten years sounds about right ;)
Anyhow, I'm looking forward to reading more of this story.