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Alright, that was funny^^. Seems that the monks weren't as accurate as everybody thought.
Like your style and dialogs. Reading feels smoothly and imagination is stimulated. Good work!
The plot itself is... well, it made me laugh. :-P

Okay, I have another addition to my list of favorite lines of all time: "Nobody can control their kegel muscles like a slayer." Just perfect! And leave it to you to make futa fun!

Haha, the key gets a shaft and Faith is shafted. There needs to be more chapters, knocking Faith up?

Without even looking at the prompt word itself I knew exactly who the star would be (and great use of the word itself). :) I also laughed my butt off about Xander's jealousy because it implies that she showed it to him at some point. Also, I'm pleasantly surprised that there was no torture or such, but with the pure arousing hotness I'm not complaining one bit. :) How this change came about really doesn't matter to me because the story itself was fun.

This seems like a typo: "her face was flushed but arousal"

The details were delicious. It sounds like Faith sort of snuck up on her but Dawn was distracted enough with her "exploring" not to be shocked or scared. Then again, it sounds like she was pent up for a few weeks since she hadn't used it (well, except as you wrote). The idea of those two together alone is great, but you made it pretty terrific.

I love it. Maybe you could do a second chapter with Willow and Kennedy taking advantage of Dawn's new... uh, appendage.