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Part 2 - Learning Her Place: This chapter has some hot scenes, but it doesn't really work for me. It might've worked as chapter 5 or 6, but not as chapter 2.

I think the problem is that you let Faith submit WAY too soon and easily; she's supposed to have this strong rebellious personality, but you've already turned her into a simpering sub in the SECOND chapter!

The most interesting part of this storyline would (or at least should) be the way Faith gradually gives herself over to Dawn, as the youngest Summers girl slowly but surely makes Faith her bitch thru the clever use of blackmail, Faith's subconscious need to be punished for the evil she's done, and her own sexy body. But this obviously wouldn't happen overnight. Unfortunately, you pretty much skipped it entirely and went straight to the tamed Faith part of the story.

Awesomely hot chapter. Faith and Dawn are soo hot together! It's a relief to read that this time you're going for a more willing sub than sadistic destruction. Romance and Spanking. Fingers crossed for a happy ending.

Super hot. I'm with Cal that it would be nice if it was just F/F for once and as there is no M/F symbol at the beginning hopefully that's what you have in mind. I'm also with Cal on preferring a happy ending, and while you're other stories were hot it would be nice if the story ended up having Dawn and Faith being in more of a traditional relationship, albeit a dom/sub one, as opposed to Faith being just a piece of meat who her top never really grows to care about.

The ending of the first chapter gives some hope for this and while Dawn sharing Faith with other girls could be fun I hope you keep it as those two sneaking around for as long as possible behind the other's backs as I find the concept really fun, although at the same time I can't wait for little Dawnie to strap on a dildo and fuck her slayer bitch up the butt.

Anyway I am a huge fan of Dom Dawn and have become a huge fan of Sub Faith through reading your work so I'll probably end up loving the majority of this story no matter where it goes.

Good start, Tom.
Dawnie sexually dominating the rebellious slayer is definitely an entertaining and also arousing story idea.

You really know how to write lesbian domination TL, bravo! I've read your other stuff and they are just sooo intense. Just a few things:

1) Can it just be girls this time? I know it's degradation and Snyder was a wicked cool choice for the Joyce story, but honestly I thought the fem only scenes were the hottest.
2) It's S7 so please don't go with the Harbingers and UberVamps. The Oz and Clem stories were wow, but I think it would just be weird.
3) A Happy Ending for Faith. Breaking Faith had the sultry Bostonian turned into a vengeful slutty vampire and Joyce the succubus milf left our wanton brunette a gangbanged mess. Could Faith have a happy ending. Love seeing her get dominated, honestly Dawn is my favourite choice so far, but can it be less her beaten into submission or magicked into a slave and make it something like her idea of committing to a lover is surrendering herself to them? Cliche but it would just be nice to have a romantic twist instead of "yeah, lets fuck the dark slayer beyond all repair!"

So yeah, looking forward to seeing more. Love the FaithDawn pairing. I hated Willow, I mean she went full evil and then everyone just lets her walk back in? The S8 comic may have retconned Warren back to life but she still tortured him and she killed Rack and probably a whole heap of police. Point of fact she went worse than Faith ever did and yet they all forgive her? Whedon dropped the ball on that one. Maybe next time round Willow is the one that gets broken...... Joyce made a wicked cool milf but Dawn... Have you seen Michelle Tractenberg in Gossip Girl and Eurotrip? Gorgeous. So yeah...make it nothing but femslash and lets have a happy ending this time.