schedule
April 21, 2010 at 12:00 AM
OH, WOW.... I love this. The idea of magical pencils is a good one, and the scenarios you put the characters in are perfect for each one. I really like your style! Can't wait to read your other stories!
schedule
March 20, 2010 at 12:00 AM
I guess I might've gotten spoiled by the huge amount of twisted sex stuff you put into previous chapters, but I feel this chapter could've used much more of that. Especially since this Bronze stage setting is pretty much perfect for putting on really perverted sex shows featuring some of Faith's other slaves as well, instead of just a strip show and an anal gangbanging with Willow.
Even if you don't want to "reward" Willow by pairing her up with Buffy by making them perform a kinky humiliating sex show for their classmates, you could've come up with other stuff like a really perverted Summers' sluts act featuring Buffy, Dawn and Joyce. Or give Cordy the chance to be Dom for a short while by having her act as Willow's Mistress in a BDSM stage show, perhaps with Faith promising Cordy some kind of reward if she does a REALLY good job of humiliating Willow (something for Cordy already possesses an innate talent). There are plenty of possibilities here, so I definitely feel you didn't take this idea to its full potential.
Anyhow, I do think this version of the chapter is better than the previous one as Faith's dialogue & behaviour is more in-character than before.
I'm sorry your hard work didn't get more positive reviews.
Even if you don't want to "reward" Willow by pairing her up with Buffy by making them perform a kinky humiliating sex show for their classmates, you could've come up with other stuff like a really perverted Summers' sluts act featuring Buffy, Dawn and Joyce. Or give Cordy the chance to be Dom for a short while by having her act as Willow's Mistress in a BDSM stage show, perhaps with Faith promising Cordy some kind of reward if she does a REALLY good job of humiliating Willow (something for Cordy already possesses an innate talent). There are plenty of possibilities here, so I definitely feel you didn't take this idea to its full potential.
Anyhow, I do think this version of the chapter is better than the previous one as Faith's dialogue & behaviour is more in-character than before.
I'm sorry your hard work didn't get more positive reviews.
schedule
March 18, 2010 at 12:00 AM
Excellent developments so far, like the story....Oh so Anya has turned up in the Mayors office, my immediate thought. 'Two Willows, no waiting."
schedule
March 2, 2010 at 12:00 AM
I'm baaaack bitch! Love what you and ANnon82 are doing with the story (he really is an asset to you chrissy) it's getting really deep and twisted and yet keeping in with canon and still setting up further chapters really well. And thanks for the sneaky peak at Chapter 6 Part two, you guys have got me totally hooked now. Best fic in ages.
schedule
February 25, 2010 at 12:00 AM
Wow! Epic chapter.
You obviously put a lot of time & effort into this one, and it definitely paid off.
Best chapter yet, IMHO.
Can't wait to see what further degradations Faith has got in store for Willow.
You obviously put a lot of time & effort into this one, and it definitely paid off.
Best chapter yet, IMHO.
Can't wait to see what further degradations Faith has got in store for Willow.
schedule
February 12, 2010 at 12:00 AM
I really enjoy the Magic Pencils and am eagerly awaiting part 2 of Better Dead than Red. Also kind of curious as to what sort of outfit Faith will end up in to make the Mayor happy. Will this be a "One Good Day" fic for the Mayor where he doesn't get blown up?
schedule
February 9, 2010 at 12:00 AM
Really not keen on the poop, but liked the Mayor - Faith convo, and Willow's humilation.
Oh and just a thought, if you're bringing Catherine into it, one would assume you're going to bring Amy?
How about giving Faith a consenting partner? Anya would probably love what she's doing, seeing as she's only
recently human. And Amy had a serious edge to her, later in the series.
One person I wouldn't consider using is Tara, I just don't see her doing anything to raise Faith's wrath.
Oh and just a thought, if you're bringing Catherine into it, one would assume you're going to bring Amy?
How about giving Faith a consenting partner? Anya would probably love what she's doing, seeing as she's only
recently human. And Amy had a serious edge to her, later in the series.
One person I wouldn't consider using is Tara, I just don't see her doing anything to raise Faith's wrath.
schedule
January 25, 2010 at 12:00 AM
The plot thickens!
And Queen C becomes the bitch of her "Cordettes" and gets used as a toilet brush holder! Bet she didn't see that coming :)
So I really enjoyed the first two parts of this chapter, but the last part was... strange.
That little heart-to-heart conversation seemed like a good idea, and it started out OK, but then it kinda drags on. And then suddenly the entire story comes to a screeching halt as Faith starts babbling about anagrams for no apparent reason.
I really didn't see the point of this. First of, it probably took you at least an hour of valuable writing time to try to come up with usable anagrams you can make from the Scoobies' names, but you only really managed to make something that (kinda) make sense out of Willow's name. Case in point: "And, Cordelia Chase is 'A Sored Chalice'", she boasted. Really? Not much to boast here, IMHO.
If I were the Mayor I'd seriously consider sending Faith to a good shrink at this point, or just run away really fast ;)
Anyhow, overall a pretty good chapter.
And Queen C becomes the bitch of her "Cordettes" and gets used as a toilet brush holder! Bet she didn't see that coming :)
So I really enjoyed the first two parts of this chapter, but the last part was... strange.
That little heart-to-heart conversation seemed like a good idea, and it started out OK, but then it kinda drags on. And then suddenly the entire story comes to a screeching halt as Faith starts babbling about anagrams for no apparent reason.
I really didn't see the point of this. First of, it probably took you at least an hour of valuable writing time to try to come up with usable anagrams you can make from the Scoobies' names, but you only really managed to make something that (kinda) make sense out of Willow's name. Case in point: "And, Cordelia Chase is 'A Sored Chalice'", she boasted. Really? Not much to boast here, IMHO.
If I were the Mayor I'd seriously consider sending Faith to a good shrink at this point, or just run away really fast ;)
Anyhow, overall a pretty good chapter.
schedule
January 17, 2010 at 12:00 AM
Saw the added glamor to the collar so that Buffy experiences the humiliation while no one can really see her, cool.
schedule
January 16, 2010 at 12:00 AM
The scene with Cordy and the Cordettes was great. However I can't wait to see what Faith is going to do to Harmony for snubbing her when she was out with Harmony. Very inventive and twisted story. I'm getting great ideas reading this!