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This story got linked on a private fanfiction forum.

My comment to you is please, for the love of whatever deity or atheism you hold dear, proof read and spell check this thing.

The most hideous error is when, in the middle of a good long lesbian shag, Dawnie becomes Dwaine.

Dwaine has no place in hot lesbian action.

None.

Thanks for the feed back. I had corrected one instance of that problem and I am embarrassed that I missed so many more. I have rechecked both chapters and as far as I can tell I have banished Dwaine for good. I also corrected some grammar problems I found and reworded a couple of passages I thought were kind of clumsy.

If anyone finds anything else please let me know. I have found that it is more difficult than I had anticipated to proof read your own material because my mind tends to fill in what I had intended to write even when the page actually says something else.

Sincerely,
Tragalia