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for Movie, Milkshakes, and Domination

by MTL

person JoeHundredaire
schedule November 30, 2012 at 12:00 AM
Granted this is an older story and most author's have too much of an ego to revisit their older work when they've improved but... the formatting makes reading an already difficult story significantly worse. And as much fun as you may think showing both sides of an encounter is, you could have easily done so using two chapters for the two girls or two entirely separate stories.
person Z
schedule November 16, 2011 at 12:00 AM
More please? This could get some more stories added.
schedule September 3, 2011 at 12:00 AM
Not............ bad............ but.......... try........ cutting........... down....... on............. the............... ellipses.............

No, for srs. This was a good story, but the gratuitous use of periods made the thing almost unreadable.
person firelarc
schedule November 12, 2009 at 12:00 AM
intresting story. not just screwing each others brains ut. I was wonderin if there was to be a sequal. Maybe a confrontation with willow etc.
person Syko_Slayer_13
schedule May 15, 2008 at 12:00 AM
god that was so hotttt. i have been craving sub-Tara stories. I think i ruined my chair. lol lookin forward to the next sub-tara story.
person Anon
schedule March 22, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Fun story! Also plausible, which means it's well written. Nice job!
person Anon
schedule March 11, 2008 at 12:00 AM
I really like the story. I hope it wasn't pland as a one shot. It is really to good for a one shot.
person Lone Voice
schedule March 2, 2008 at 12:00 AM
this story is reaally goog and i hope that theres more!