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for Disciplining Dawn

by MTL

person doug
schedule March 13, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Hello, and a big 'Hot Dammnn' as way of thanks for this. I thought I'd posted comments earlier when there were only two chps, but finding thats not the case I had to sit and say 'Thank you, Thank you, Thank You!!!' for some scorching reading. For now just write and I'll follow wherever, but as I sit here I'm thinking lets just keep it between the girls with no knowledge of\by the -gang. Thanks again.
person Anon
schedule March 11, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Very sexy update! Glad you brought out the "meaner" side of Buffy. Of course she still loves her sister, but it's good she made it clear to Dawn that discipline was just that - discipline - and not some erotic, sisterly foreplay. I think this is your best story so far - I really like that you're taking your time to bring more emotional depth to the story.

Keep it up!
person v
schedule March 10, 2008 at 12:00 AM
update again soon!
schedule March 2, 2008 at 12:00 AM
This is really good and I'll look forward to the rest.
If at least one male character is coming into the mix can I hope that he will dissaprove of the relationship between the sisters. Both Summers girls naked and bent over at the same time!!
schedule February 29, 2008 at 12:00 AM
awesome story.. please have Xander involed in this somehow.
person Oric13
schedule February 29, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Good 2nd chapter. I'm really loving stern & strict Buffy.
person Fred
schedule February 27, 2008 at 12:00 AM
HELLOOOOOOOOOOOO!!!!!!!!!! WHERE'S THE UPDATES?!!!!!!!
person Anon
schedule February 24, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Nice...and naughty, lol. I can see why Oric13 likes this story; it's definitely something in his vein of writing.
person TK
schedule February 24, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Please update soon!!
person Oric13
schedule February 23, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Excellent start. I like that you've somehow managed to make the Buffy/Dawn discipline/sex seem in-character for them. You've done a great job explaining the motivation behind their actions.

I hope that in the following chapters you focus on the good stuff (discipline & kinky sex) instead of going all angsty with a lengthy Buffy guilt-trip. It was the excessive amount of angst that eventually made me lose interest in Donna's Bitch.