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please make the male member of their escapades spike cause if it's xander....ewwww

So is this dead?

i hope you update it soon cause i like it so far

Well, me again. And so, a few items, starting with a big Thank You! Well, first, when I posted after reading 8 (meaning when you hit that button on the end) I got to read all the thoughts of everyone before me. Including stuff I hadn't read yet. So I looked a little bit, but not too hard.

So, now that I've read 9 And 10, I also agree with those who say you should shy away from either Xander and/or Spike being involved. They have all spilled too much blood and honor and love to cross such a line as that, if left under normal circumstances... and we All know dear Buffy is anything but normal. How would the boys respond to a moment of weakness And have that slutty blonde offer an enticement tooo strong to resist (I'm thinking like how SMG was dressed up for a cover of RollingStone mag to play the devil). Now for Xander it should be a big NO for anything with either Dawn or Buffy, but Anya??? Lets hope her grip on humanity (and her 'love' for Xander) is stronger.
As for Spike, no, he'll not sully the 'lil bit... but her sister is something else. I could see Dawn being sat down to watch a lesson in self-discipline when its shown that Buffy crossed a line or four herself, knew it, and did it again anyways. And Spikes' pull to the Slayer, to show Her in another way to his way of thinking that they are still more alike then she will admit. And she can bitch all she wants, I think alot of us see (and yes will accept) she likes it rough. Nay, needs it rough, to help her keep the creature she feels inside herself contained, if not outright tamed.

So, that leaves us with somebody faceless and nameless: RJ fits the bill. And that Self-punishment in 9, and then that hot scene in the bedroom. You're really hitting the mark, and thank you, I also now realize you were giving me something else I asked for with what you had play out at the end of 8, and showed us another bit with those bars that Dawn doesn't remember being there before in 10.
Just keep it up, Dear Author. Please. Thanx

Well, its me again, and it seemed like every few days I'd look for another chapter, but left stuck to stew in my own juices. HA! And then, there it was. So I start reading... and barely get to where they're saying 'good morning' and I'd have to run out. A couple 3 weeks or so, I sit to bask in your words (wank off), and Shit, have to take off again.
Somewhere along the line I saw that there was Another chapter! I keep trying to read from where I left off, and They kept pissing me off. And there is another chapter... then another!!!
Well, I finally finished chp 8 with but 1 short interruption this morning. Now everyone, lets think about what chp 8 was like oh half-way through? What was my delay this morn'?
I SPUUGHED into the bathroom sink!
But 8 is now done, and Sunday is all reading day for me.
Damn fine job keep up the good stuff. Thanks.

Honestly, at this point I'm more interested in seeing where the night goes as far as Buffy/Dawn/other debauchery. The idea of Buffy whoring Dawn out and then punishing her is, unless you introduce any new sets of kinks to their life beyond bondage and the stereotypical over the top dom/sub routine, pretty much all you have left to explore. Anything else right now is just a retread of ground you walked in the earlier chapters. This one, I just sorta skimmed through, which is disappointing to me because I've been eagerly awaiting a new chapter.

I hope that you have more brains than most of the reviewers; both Spike and Xander are thoroughly unacceptable men to use in the story due entirely to the fact that they care. Even if Buffy has fallen into depravity with Dawn, unless you want to jump the shark by turning it into "Everyone has a secret dark side and we never knew", I can't see Xander approving of Buffy and Dawn's incestuous relationship, much less partaking in statutory rape as Buffy whores Dawn out. Spike also claims to care about Buffy and while he might be easier to convince, he treated Dawn as a younger sister and respected Joyce enough that I can't see him doing it either.

In conclusion... I think a trip to a back room at Willy's with a pair (or more) of nice bigger-than-human demon men is just what Dawnie needs. ;)

please let the guy be Xander pretty pkease

Nice Update, I like it! Seing how Buffy and Dawn interact with each other and the scoobies while still figuring out how to best handle their mistress/slave relationship makes for some entertaining reading. Hopefully there'll be more of that in the next chapter...? Keep 'em cumming... ;-)

is xander going to get some pussy in this story either form dawn or buffy