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Yes, its me, and its 2015 ???!!??!! My last review was Waaayyyy back in 2009, like alot of other peoples. What with stories then getting new chps and with fresh new stories being added, WOW, time does fly. So, they're in the Bronze, Buffy has a new `imported` beer for the gang..... and YES, I had to rub another one out!!!!
Fire up the whizbang gizmo, and please PLEASE, give us some more for this???

You have a lot of potential here that goes untapped because of using the S/M trope of Master/Slave. By having Dawn do homework in your Chapter five section you provide a way for the topic of endentured service to come up which is a type of contract labor that was common in the early American colonies historically where the servant would serve for a term of something like seven year after which they were set free. With this sort of contract in place you could pace the story and allow it to become a strange romance allowing for Dawn and Buffy to keep surprising a one upping each relationship going in all facets of life instead Dawn becoming this weird sex crazed and marionette/robot, they could still act like sisters with the younger/older dynamic still there while still seeing overtones of dominance and submission warring with love and caring and the movement towards and equal relationship and marriage... You could easily make this forty chapters and have it equal the quality of some of the best Buffy/Dawn stories on the Internet like "The Kiss", "Dawn's Confusion", and my personal favorite "For You".

Chapter #2.)
Well, I liked Buffy in the beginning of this chapter, she has a lot of proper attitudes, but her definition of girl-girl love is a bit off: Platonic (sisterly) love between females is absolutely beautiful and proper, for instance; her willingness to die for her friends is such a love... but girl-girl Sexual 'love' (what I would rightly call a form of lesbian lust) is Never Ok! If it comes up as a Desire, which you rightly have her dealing with... that is Nothing but an email from Perdition, and not wicked in desire (desire is never sinful, only acts are), but if one Acts upon it: then one does wrong! (that's what I'd tell her as her pastor, in fact)
Faith had her own issues to deal with, as would Willow.
Honestly, I liked Buffy's attitudes in the beginning of this chapter!
Good work on a horrible situation.
Buffy the sadist; that's different!

That's a great story, best of yours in fact. It's so sad it wasn't finished. Maybe you can continue it? That would be more than great...

Is it dead?

Dammit, I need to see more of this! Update soon!

And may I make a request: Dawn in a catholic schoolgirl outfit. *drools* Maybe Buffy could spank her for being a naughty girl, then make her eat her pussy, then fuck her hard with a strap-on.

damn.... hope to see more of this soon and i would love to see a one tree hill fic where Peyton doms ether brooke and/or haley

great sory can xander get some buffy or dawn

Oh, god, but its me. Again. And damn if it hasn't been a dogs' age since my last posting. Well, thanks again to our great Author and this latest chp... Well, I see that idea of `Peas and Carrots` took hold, and the more I think of it maybe it Should be Anya that gets Buffy's permission. And it just occured to me it might also be some nameless Bartender or a Bouncer who just happened to notice that the light from the Kliegs was.. drifting as they were pouring drinks. So of course the eye wandered, and being used to working there perhaps knew the trick of standing behind a post or beam to shield the glare away to see the shadows in an unlit spot better. And saw something that made them Need to take a 'Bathroom Break'. Damn, just thought of this, too. What about `Kit`, Dawns' friend from school???
And still a whole lot of weekend left!!

God, but this is some good stuff. Thanks again.

Thank you for finally updating this story! I really liked the latest chapter, VERY sexy! I'm sticking with my assessment, that this is your best story so far. Please keep at it, I really enjoy reading it!