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May 9, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Okay I'm now confused, I think you rushed it a bit even though I love the ideas. How can Xander be innocent
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May 8, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Dude, this story is pretty intense so far.
I am very curious to know what Xander was up to.
But, the chapters are way too short!
Lots more please.
I am very curious to know what Xander was up to.
But, the chapters are way too short!
Lots more please.
schedule
May 8, 2007 at 12:00 AM
I think your story has potential.
I do suggest though that you add more narrative and
flesh out your descriptions a little more and then your
story will be so much better.
I do suggest though that you add more narrative and
flesh out your descriptions a little more and then your
story will be so much better.
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May 8, 2007 at 12:00 AM
this is surprisingly good if just a little short. i look forward to the next chapter
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May 8, 2007 at 12:00 AM
what meanies! I hope xan-man makes them feel like shit... Hope to see more soon!
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May 7, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Nics start a little longer would be good but it was really intriguing and i love A/S/X stories so I'd love to see where this goes and let me guess Xander is already pregnant.
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May 7, 2007 at 12:00 AM
This is awesome I wish you would continue soon please.
schedule
May 7, 2007 at 12:00 AM
interesting start hope to see more soon