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I am LOVING this story!!! It's beautiful and very well written.

aww what a sweet chapter. I love how they are acting towards each other.

I really do like this story. I love William's character and the detail that you put into their lives in that specific time...However (no offense or anything) the story is moving so slow to me! It doesn't even seem as if Buffy even likes William yet. And I have an odd feeling that William isn't even Spike because there is nothing that shows their is a connection between them except they have the same face. I think you should work on putting some movement into the chapters. If you are writing a story that is long (like 50 chapters or something) I kind of understand that your trying to develop the setting and the situation that the story is about. But if the story is just a short fic (20 chapters or so) then something should be happening. Start with putting some chemistry between Buffy and William. Wiliam's adorable but Buffy is so... hard. She's so blunt and kind of mean to William, it makes it hard to like her. By the way, this is just a little constructive critisism that you asked for. I'm not trying to insult your work or tell you that you're a sucky writer or anything, cauuse you're not! I actually enjoy your style of writing and I love William's character as well, so don't change him! Keep on writing and update soon! :)

Oh, I am enjoying this story. I just want to pet William, he's so cute. And I feel awful for him, since I suspect Buffy may have no choice but to break his heart, or the timeline will go all to hell. (If you can get around that, that'd be ok with me. *g*) Thank you.

You know something? I love this story. There are so many undertones, and you have given yourself so much potential with what to do next.

Can I just ask. Did Spike recognise Buffy when he first came to Sunnydale???

Please keep writing this. Just because tons of reviews don't show up doesn't mean there aren't people who are reading it. Nothing is more frustrating than a story that just ends because the author decides no one likes it due to few reviews. Do YOU like it? Then it's worth writing.

Besides, it's nice to read a story where the author actually knows the rules of grammar and can spell. :)

You're handling the human William very well - you've managed to make him Victorian without making him hideously chauvinistic. You've also managed to avoid making Anne maniuplative or deceitfully domineering while allowing her to love her son. Very well done!

Keep writing!

I want to address a couple of questions/comments made by some reviewers.

Strangcandy, I see where you're coming from about the story moving slowly but this is going to be a very long (novel length) tale so I have time to get the characters where I need them to be. Also, I wanted to be very realistic in the development of Buffy and William's relationship. In the canon of my story Spike has not redeemed himself through Glory (the story picks up after 'Forever' so he didn't have the opportunity.) Therefore the last interaction Buffy had with Spike was in 'Crush' when he tied her up in the crypt and tried to force her to tell him she loved him. Naturally, I think it would be harder for her to trust and like William because of this. She will soon realize that she can't blame the human for the vampire's mistakes, but it won't happen overnight. However, please don't feel like I will get angry with you if you have some constructive criticism for me; I won't. I appreciate your honesty and thank you for the review. :)

Chloe, I would love to answer your question about Spike but unfortunately I can't without giving some pieces of the story away. So I guess you'll just have to wait a bit. Which means keep reading and reviewing! ;)

Boadicea, please don't take my comment as a threat that I will stop writing the story. I love this story--I couldn't let it go if I tried. But I'm posting it to several other sites as well and if I don't feel it is getting some kind of reader interest here I would rather just not waste the time posting. I didn't mean to sound like one of those whiny writers demanding hundreds of reviews. :P

Thanks to each of you three and to everyone else who reviewed as well. I appreciate all the feedback. :)

What a charming, wonderful story! Deinately not the typical buffy goes back to the past sort of story. I can tell you've reall put a lot of work into researching the Victorian era. I can't wait for more chapters!

I'm enjoying your story. I especially like how you insert bits of historical facts and info into your story.

Keep up the great work and post often... I can't wait to see what happens... I think that bracelet is going to be very important when Buffy comes back to the future... I just get this feeling...anyway please can we have some more!!!