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Oh dear, Buffy's fallen asleep. In William's room. ON William. This can never end well.
Love the fic so far Addie!

I'm glad your muse seems to be back. I feel badly for William. I really do.

I think the story is interesting.

I didn't know where you were going when you first started telling the battered Spike, strong Buffy son/stepmom story. It feels like you are stuck between going too far where incest is a central storyline and exploring Buffy as moral champion. If Buffy put herself in a position where William ground himself against her to the point of ejaculation, then I haven't figured out how you can stop the story there.

Also with Angel/Liam being a prick in this story, I don't see how this is going to work out in Buffy and William's favor. Your story has Liam as the overcontrolling, domineering mysogenistic husband who grinds women under his feet. You haven't cut yourself any slack away from the 3 central characters you've written.

Perhaps you can explore what Buffy was missing when she met Liam. She thought he suited her needs and saved her from a Cindarella tale but now she realizes she needs something more because William gives it to her. How does she figure it out?

What is that William thinks Buffy brings to his botched childhood? Will he figure it out before Liam pops? Does Darla want to have anything else to do with her son William? Does college looming after the summer break mean that he plans to sex Buffy and go on about his educational business?

Will Liam leave Buffy for the next blond bombshell?

Each storyline tightens into a fresh take on what you have already developed here.

Hope this helps (chapter 8 asks 4 our review input).

Genna

I'm so sorry if this comes out wrong :
Bloody buggerin' hell! How can Buffy be so n?ive!
'Sunburn?' Even I wouldn't fall for that.
There. Thats my rant over. But I do understand that Buffy needs to been seen as the loyal wife. I'm glad William has finally admitted he wants Buffy. But I really wanted to jump in the screen and kick Liam where it hurts. It's people like that, that don't deserve to be fathers! I like were this is headed. You are a very talented writer Addie. I'm just glad you let that show through in your Fics. Well done. I look forward to the next update. And hope you're job treats your brain better soon. -Naomi

whoop! This is the first buffy fanfic I've ever read, seriously.
and I think this one takes the cake. Wow!
Buffy, and Will are so cute! Damn his daddy!! lol
I hope you come back and update, because this story is getting
really juicy! hehe

kudos!

VERY GOOD DRAMA! and another good chapter as well.....have a good thanks-giving!!!

I'm really liking this story, so I thought I'd let you know. And that's even with the fact that I really like Angel. But your protrayal of him as a villinous character essentially makes him a different character than the one I love (if that makes any sense), so it doesn't bother me. Anyway, you are a topnotch writer, and the story is a lot of fun. Thanks for all the hard work you put into your writing!

It is ones again a really good story. Ik can't wait to read more. I like how you made angel and spike father and son. I still hope that buffy will end up leaving angel, but hey that'sjust me. i like spike en buffy together.

Thanks ever so Addie!
I've been looking forward to this post since the last one!
Stupid ground rules.
I woulda jumped William's bones soon as he got in the house!
But I understand there's gotta be a plot.
I like that both of them are sexually frustrated. Not just the teenager.
Yay hormones =D

great chapter, have a good thanksgiving.