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August 5, 2008 at 12:00 AM
What is wrong with you?! Finish it! You got me sitting at the edge of my damn seat reading the best story on this god forsaken site and you stop? Please update soon or I might just DIE!
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November 29, 2006 at 12:00 AM
i love the story! keep up the good work!
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October 30, 2006 at 12:00 AM
#5 - Plum people were reading. The main reason people don't review is the same reason they don't write the stories: the blank white screen is scary. Then there are the authors who are delighted to get smily faces and or more please, while other authors find more please or other begging reviews offensive. So rather than take a chance most people just read without reviewing.
That being said. This is a very nice story. The 3way is well done, and the Spike watching Willow is nice. The Spike / Willow non-sex interaction needs a little polish. Keep up the writing.
That being said. This is a very nice story. The 3way is well done, and the Spike watching Willow is nice. The Spike / Willow non-sex interaction needs a little polish. Keep up the writing.
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October 29, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Oh I'm enjoying it alright. The only thing that's missing, which would make this story perfect, is Spangel. I think it would make this already awsome story even better if it were Spike/Angelus/Willow, not just Spike/Willow and Angelus/Willow at the same time. Just a thought.
Yours
Lynn
Yours
Lynn
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October 29, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Great fic
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October 24, 2006 at 12:00 AM
:) loved it, very nicely written, but i'm sad that it's not longer
lol, excellent story
lol, excellent story
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October 24, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Hey
you complained coz of too little people review your fic soo:
I generaly like the type of fics like this one, bearelly above pwp,
you should try to dig deeper on characters motives
what i like the most on writing fics on tv shows or books is you get the chance to show others your take on characters that allready exist.
Maybe make them do something you whish it was shown on tv or such
Your Spike is a little to unfazed by Angelus's baiting and you did not give us why is that soo.
We are used (mostly) on Spike who can't stand Angelus, so try to go there and explain why is Willow so brave and where is Drusilla and her vision thing in all this story
What I've learned from reading tons (no kidding) of fics about thresomes is they all tend to be predictablle after a whille
Ading drama from a new perspective is a good way of making your story memorable to your readers
so try not to:
-Kill off Dru like some unimmportant nuttjob
-Make Buffy hatefull till she gets too pathetic for your readers to read on without wishing her future in hell
-show your love for Xander by making him a part of the "familly"
-make Giles a blind middle-aged British guy when is comes to seeing what's in front of him(he is alot better than that and if you don't take my word for it go back and watch a few eps in season two and take notes on what he does)
And remember this is constructive critisism in waiting of the part 6
you complained coz of too little people review your fic soo:
I generaly like the type of fics like this one, bearelly above pwp,
you should try to dig deeper on characters motives
what i like the most on writing fics on tv shows or books is you get the chance to show others your take on characters that allready exist.
Maybe make them do something you whish it was shown on tv or such
Your Spike is a little to unfazed by Angelus's baiting and you did not give us why is that soo.
We are used (mostly) on Spike who can't stand Angelus, so try to go there and explain why is Willow so brave and where is Drusilla and her vision thing in all this story
What I've learned from reading tons (no kidding) of fics about thresomes is they all tend to be predictablle after a whille
Ading drama from a new perspective is a good way of making your story memorable to your readers
so try not to:
-Kill off Dru like some unimmportant nuttjob
-Make Buffy hatefull till she gets too pathetic for your readers to read on without wishing her future in hell
-show your love for Xander by making him a part of the "familly"
-make Giles a blind middle-aged British guy when is comes to seeing what's in front of him(he is alot better than that and if you don't take my word for it go back and watch a few eps in season two and take notes on what he does)
And remember this is constructive critisism in waiting of the part 6
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October 21, 2006 at 12:00 AM
:) You said a smiley face would work, lol. It's good!
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September 17, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Smiley, definately smiley. More please. Stupid cliffie.
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August 24, 2006 at 12:00 AM
please update the story i love it and want to know what happens next.