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June 3, 2003 at 12:00 AM
I'm a bit confused regarding the beginning of your chapter. I'm making the assumption that the aeroport scene is with Spike... though tricking your readers might be the point [I've seen it done before with good results]. I think your story has real promise. Spell check, and perhaps a beta reader, are in order. Watch your grammar, punctuation, and proper capitalisation, all.
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Parker's such a pillock. Glad Spike stepped in, though Buffy ought to have been able to kick his arse across the car park being the Slayer and all. Which has me asking, 'Is this an AU fic'?
Parker's such a pillock. Glad Spike stepped in, though Buffy ought to have been able to kick his arse across the car park being the Slayer and all. Which has me asking, 'Is this an AU fic'?
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May 29, 2003 at 12:00 AM
Nasty Parker. grrrr. Always did hate that prat. :D
Anyway, I just wanted to say that this fic has such great potential... can't wait to see more!!!
Anyway, I just wanted to say that this fic has such great potential... can't wait to see more!!!
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May 28, 2003 at 12:00 AM
Nice concept, not too sure on pairings and it was kinda confusing to read, the summary drew me in but I was kinda disappointed. You've got a great idea but it could use a little tweaking in the grammar department and the organization of the story. It could just be me and if it then don't even take mviewview to heart. It's merely my opinion.