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by Spikiesluv4life

person LitCrit
schedule March 5, 2008 at 12:00 AM
suggestions ahead:


still wanna read/ Okay \/

the whole sentence/paragraph about her getting the information out of andrew seems tedious-especially since she tended to be monosllyabic when dealing with spike if at all possible.

So chnag it to " It wasn't hard." or " It was Andrew."

Just clean it up ^_^ but in a way to promote flow I mean.
person Milliee
schedule November 29, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Very cute! Loved Angel's part.
person Magenta
schedule November 29, 2007 at 12:00 AM
ummmm not a chapter! lol
schedule November 28, 2007 at 12:00 AM
I liked it... :D
but what was with the second chapter?... all it said was fuck... O.o..

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person Jags
schedule July 11, 2006 at 12:00 AM
loved it! it was awesome