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Interesting story. I know after setting us up for the angst and eventual make-up sex and tenderness you are not going to leave us hanging. I look forward to more. That being said, you have quite a few typos and several areas where your verb tenses get really confused. I agree with ShadowCat that a good editor or Beta reader is needed. Another thing that would help is setting the GrammerCheck or Grammatik preferences in your word processing program to be more stringent. Although it won't catch everything - especially the wrong word [in the right tense or form of speech] spelled correctly - it will catch non-parrallel construction. Good-luck and write more soon.

I really liked this. I liked that Xander is so conflicted between what he sees as duty and his heart. I hope you wrote a sequel.

Nice story, but you might want to proofread before you post or find a beta reader. There's a lot of grammatical boo-boos that a good proofreading could fix. Other than that, good story.

Man that was awesome. Really. You get inside the characters heads. I'm looking forward to a seond chapter (if by looking foward you mean ready-to-drop-everything-when-it-arrives)

Yummy! Especially liked, 'It was Xander?s theory that demons can deal with being slain by a five-foot-three one hundred pound girl, but drew the line at getting un-fun anal probes and dissected.'

Thanks for sharing!