Chapter #1 Review #1 from: me.
Sir, It recently hit me as I read through this chapter's lines that it appears that the "mirror incident" (which could well be Faith making fun of Buffy due to some of her lines), it *looks* to me as if she's been fighting with her stepsister so she takes to making fun of her via mocking her in the mirror; if that bond exists between them in this, as in some of your other ideas (which I hope for); that's downright spectacular!
Anyway, you Oric13 know who I am in all likelihood, and are well more than the welcomest person to reply to me in emails, if that suits your views of how to reply to a review.
I hope it does, because I'm trying to sound out if I got it right what's happening here between them.
LOVED that part if so, it cracked me up, the part where Faith's mocking Buffy by calling her shallow, emotionally speaking- just like if they're stepsisters who're close in age and in this case: fighting... that was FUNNY!
I mean the part about where she feels the need to be the center of the universe, that kind of egosticical and emotionally shallow portrayal of her- that was funny- oh, not to have it done to the person, but the touch that she'd do it, so close to the type of stepsibilng bullying that can tend to come up from time to time... can you imagine if Mrs. Summers were to hear Fatih making fun of Buffy like that, or if Dawn lets slip to Buffy that Faith was making fun of her, in a different take on this? That's what I'm referring to as "funny"... the domestic drama.
The full chapter 17 has been posted, but there will be an entirely new chapter 18 and also possible a chapter 19 (with the current chapters 18 & 19 becoming 20 & 21).
Also did you ever complete the full version of chapter 17?
Sorry if I sounded a bit harsh, but I really don't like seeing a promising summary, clicking on it, and then discovering it's one of those not-even-a-single-freakin'-page "stories".
It's great if you want to try your hand at writing fanfiction (the Buffyverse can always use more enthusiastic writers), just try to put together at least a 5 page chapter before you post it.
i'm truly sorry i offended you so much with my first try into fanfiction.
always been a fan of ur work will take ur advise.
anyway, I'll say it now, loud and clear this is my favourite fanfic EVER!
I loved it so much that Oric and I worked out a sequal together called 'Thanks for taking care of my body Faith!' showing how Faith and her sexslave Cordy ended up and what sexy stuff Buffy got up to both in Faith's body and in her own once she got back to Sunnydale, both she and her friends/family having been sexually liberated by their experience(find it at http://buffy.adultfanfiction.net/authors.php?no=7021 if you're interested)
but enough blowing my own trumpet, love this fic, it's fabulous, so kinky, so erotic, so well written, such a great grasp of the characters and situations. I never thought of Joyce in a sexual way until I read this fic but she's now one of my favourite characters to read/write. equally I was never a fan of Joyce/Buffy relationships but this fic changed my mind which is probably the greatest compliment of all. I now love to read/write Buffy/Joyce/Dawn.
a very criticisms;
1. Oric takes SOOOOO long to publish, he's infuriating
2. Don't like the hints about Faith's abusive childhood but I have to accept that this is consistent with the damaged girl we know
3. Can never find chapter 17?
4. The original ending was a bit of a downer for the Scoobies/Fang Gang but in the sequal Oric and I worked out a way for everyone to kiss and make up
still, brilliant stuff, truly epic, wonderful, read it over and over again and never fails to impress and arouse. we will not see it's like again!