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July 13, 2005 at 12:00 AM
This has been a very interesting story so far. But please watch your spelling and verb tensage. You keep switching between present and past tense and you've got Cordy wearing a low cut shirt that's also short and showing off her legs. So just do some proof reading and you should be good. Microsoft Word catches misspellings, but it doesn't catch misusage.
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July 13, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Cool!! Like the story...still pretty confused....but would definetly like to see more. Thanks!!
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July 11, 2005 at 12:00 AM
PLEAE CONTINUE! THIS STORY COULD GO IN SOOO MNY WAYS...CAN'T WAIT TO SEE WHAT YOU DO WITH IT. WEEEE!!
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July 8, 2005 at 12:00 AM
awww*sniffles* more pleeeeease!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!more xander!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
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July 7, 2005 at 12:00 AM
I am looking forward to the next chapters. You have characterization down well and an interesting story arc. Good luck and keep writing.
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July 7, 2005 at 12:00 AM
::sits in a moment of quiet contemplation:: I'm quite impressed with the first chapter of this story. A good plot with a rather unique(to me at least) execution, well written dialogue, and a firm platform for further chapters to build upon. I eagerly await the next installment. ::waves cheerfully and grins infectiously::
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July 7, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Oh, it's very interesting beginning! I was so proud of Xan for his wish, it was just so...Xader-ish, to wish the happy life for all his loved ones, but forget about himself. Hey, I wonder why Xander hadn't wishing Anya back to life and to be happy at this?
I however wonder why Xander don't remember his past life. Cordy has remembered all of her life, when Anyanka granted her wish, and doesn't knew anything about new reality. So why Xander doesn't remember? Maybe it's because his wish was granted by angel instead of demon?
I also wonder why Cordy, Anya and Spike still at heavens. I would be think Xander's wish about better life for everyone he?d ever cared for, was referring to all of them. Because he cared for all of them. And if he wished the better life for them, isn't they supposed to live somewhere and be happy, and not be watching his life like creepy scientists observing of results of the experiment. Because been watched all his life by someone? So not happy factor, more like creepy one. :)
Err... Is Sunnydale still hellmouth in this reality also? Or if this "better world", there aren't any demon, vampires and alike? Because last Spike's and Cordy's phrases scared me to no end.
I however wonder why Xander don't remember his past life. Cordy has remembered all of her life, when Anyanka granted her wish, and doesn't knew anything about new reality. So why Xander doesn't remember? Maybe it's because his wish was granted by angel instead of demon?
I also wonder why Cordy, Anya and Spike still at heavens. I would be think Xander's wish about better life for everyone he?d ever cared for, was referring to all of them. Because he cared for all of them. And if he wished the better life for them, isn't they supposed to live somewhere and be happy, and not be watching his life like creepy scientists observing of results of the experiment. Because been watched all his life by someone? So not happy factor, more like creepy one. :)
Err... Is Sunnydale still hellmouth in this reality also? Or if this "better world", there aren't any demon, vampires and alike? Because last Spike's and Cordy's phrases scared me to no end.
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July 6, 2005 at 12:00 AM
MORE!!!!! And Spike as Xander's guardian angel? that is great!!! MORE!!!