rate_review Reviews

So I love this story I just found you. I usually only read slash so, this is my first time reading this paring. I hope you continue. ::please, pretty please::

Um? if you still taking requests I?d like to see the girls bring Xander lunch on his work site.

It's been some time since I looked up this storie and now I find five new chapters!
The PG-13 parts are very nice, the NC-17 parts are Red Hot and sweet at the same time. Tara, Wills and Xander make a very nice Triad.

Wow. I read 1-17 in one sitting. I actually had to skip some of the sex scenes so I could finish without 'interruptions' every other chapter. I'll definatly be reading this again.
It seemed in a few chapters to approach sappy-sweet, but it stayed within my personal realm of cuteness.
Plot=Dang Good!

I await more...

As ironic as this sounds (given where you've posted this), I could do with a lot less sex. The group dynamic is something that's fascinated me for a while (I was in a triad at one point and my friend is still with her girlfriend and boyfriend at present) and I'd much rather explore how the three react to parents, Xander's crew, random bigots, a more active Hellmouth, etc. than explore how Tab A fits into Slot B.

Hello, I've read this entire thing from start to now in one sitting, and as a felow AFF writer I'd like to give my opinions.

First off, I was very pleased with the detail you put into these intimate scenes. To be perfectly honest, they resemble how I write and it's nice to see someone else put this much effort into it. I'll describe some ways I think this can be better, ignore or take note of them. :)

I liked the way you make sure the readers know this is more then just sex, there's a deep, loving relationship forming between Xander, Willow, and Tara and I like to see that in the stories I read. One thing I'm worried about though is that this story will eventually have something bad happens that causes a fight between the three and creates a lot of needless drama. I REALLY hope you don't resort to that. It brings an added element to the story, but every story does it so often these days that it's overused. Stories like this are escapism, and for once I'd like to read something that doesn't throw a dramatic curveball. :)

You stick to the characters attitudes very well, the one thing I hate the most about the stories on this site is that people can never capture the personalities, or just ignore them completely and create AU's. One thing I had a problem with though is the closeness between Willow and Xander, I don't think they're as close as they would be after making love. They've been friends since they were babies, and have meant the world to each other all their lives, but I don't get the feeling like they've really acknowledge how far they've come together. This isn't a serious problem, but it does take away from the love of the two.

Also, Willow has become a lot more adventurous, especially around the time all this had taken place. My advice is use that to your advantage, have Willow suggest something naughty that'll shock both Xander and Tara. I'm not saying to do anything really kinky, but I think it'd really make things more interesting.

Tara is obviously the shy one, both in the show and in this story, but as is show during some parts of the story she is quite naughty herself. At times, flesh that out more, but try to maintain that cute little blush she has. It's not an easy task, I know that from experience, but it's worth a try.

Now, I suggest letting someone else find out by catching them by accident. It'd be REALLY comical to have Giles or Spike catch them in the act.

Well, I've made my suggestions and comments. I haven't looked through the other comments so if this has all been suggested before then I apologize. I hope to read the next chapter soon. :)

I just finished through part 16. Wow. I love the depth their lives are taking on. The normalcy of buying new furnature is a great touch. I would really love to see more between Xander and Tara. I think things are really shaping up nicely. I think a scene on the dining room table would be really hot! Maybe some sex on the roof under the stars too. I think the Idea of Xander's crew finding out would be funny. Maybe the girls visit him at the jobsite sometime. Whatever you do please keep writing. I love this series!!

Charles

I am very much enjoying this story. I think that you have done a wonderful job of character developement and story building.

I like the way that you handled the discussion of their relationship and living arangements. I can't wait to see what's going to develope between them in the future. Keep up the good work.

I really enjoyed you story, it is nice to find a few stories here and there that have decent plot and your writing style is exceptional. It is also nice to find a story that isnt bondage, Mprg, Etc Etc, Your portrayl(sp) of a 'normal' relationship is refreshing and thorughly enjoyable. I like your characterization, i find that your characters are surprisingly in character, I especially like your take on Tara. I hope your updates come with the same level of excellence and increasing frequency.

I just found this fic the other day, and I've really enjoyed reading it. You write the characters so well, which is a rare gift.
I hope you choose to continue posting, as I'd love to continue reading.