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Awwwww! I LOVE how Angelus was being gentle with Xander! I hope that their relationship evolves to a point where they both have genuine feelings for each other but still leaving it as a Master and Pet relationship. Please post lots more, I'm anxious to see what happens!

wonderfully wicked! i love it.

nice take on the soul, deal. very twisted. Update soon please love your writing style

*squeals in delight* MORE MORE MORE MORE !!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

i can not wait for the next chapter please soon

Really good chapter.

Maybe it's because I'm just a little twisted, but I can't help hoping that Angelus gets to keep Xander.

Looking forward to more.

I really like your story so far. I love LOVE Angel/Xander stories so even if you don't make this a series keep writing and as long as it Angel/Xander/Spike or any combo of the above you will have a fan. The premise is original. I've read fics about if Angel wasn't cursed but no one thought of Darla as the cursed protagonist before. If this becomes a series I world love to see how you handle the Darla losing her soul issue. Who would give her perfect happiness, Giles? (I shake in disgust) that way Xander & Angel can help Buffy end the Apolcolypse.


My only critism is some of your scenes need more detail and your Buffy is out of charecter. Example: When Angel threathened Buffy with the death of her friends she just went home and asked if Xander wanted to go back. She never attempted to talk Xander out of going or attempted to warn and hide her friends. Where is the scene when her mother questions her about Angel and why her attacker knew Buffy? The chapter didn't have another writing to make it believeable. I thought for sure the scoobies would try to fight and/or hide and Angel would stalk and threathen. That way Angel would get a chance to kill Jessie or at least Willow's fish! That way you'd heighten the drama and it would be a gruesome scene when they found his victim. Also you never gave Xander a chance to want to go back to Angel. So the call of the bond between these charecters isn't clear.

I'm not saying you should rewrite now but remember these thoughts when you write the next chapter. Once the story is complete you may want to repost before you add it to any other sites.

Best of Luck!
Vicki

Yay! Another chapter!!! I love this story soo much, possesive Angelus is very fun to see. Well, hopefully with the claiming being complete things will start to smooth out a bit more between Angelus and Xander. Why did Darla have to come back? I never did like her very much, but it is funny that she is the one with the soul. Please post lots more!

Wow, this story is really good! I love the pairing of Xander and Angelus. Ok, I know that this may be slightly out of the character that you are trying to show, but will Angelus ever be slightly gentle or tender towards Xander? Suppose Angelus is satisfied that Xander won't run away and eventually wants Xander to genuinely like him, will he ever be a little more gentle? Please?? Lol, I know that this doesn't fit with the way that the character is right now but a wee tiny bit of tenderness would be great! I feel really sorry for Xander, (obviously) because of all of the pain that he is going through. But, I really like this story irregardless if you change any of the characters or not. It really gets my emotions going especially with the way that you write. Please post lots more cause I want to see what happens next!

hpe you write more soon poor little xander (evil Grin)