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January 10, 2005 at 12:00 AM
This was well funny, I loved the fact that Faith got all excited about the Marshmallows, and then everyone looked at her like she was crazy to choose them. That just seems so Faith to me. The kissing was pretty hot too.
The shifting point of view made it a little hard to follow until you get used to it though, maybe you could do something to distinguish whose head the reader is currently inside of, just to make it a little clearer.
Well thats my constructiveness out of the way for one night, I'm off to see what else you've got on here.
The shifting point of view made it a little hard to follow until you get used to it though, maybe you could do something to distinguish whose head the reader is currently inside of, just to make it a little clearer.
Well thats my constructiveness out of the way for one night, I'm off to see what else you've got on here.