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person Tygerlily
schedule May 15, 2003 at 12:00 AM
Loved Holding Out, Loved this one two!
person QueenBoadicea
schedule May 15, 2003 at 12:00 AM
Great story although the sentences are properly placed and it gets cut off. Don't worry; I had the same problem when I first started doing this. You just have to know where to make the breaks. Maybe you could make the beach scene the first chapter and move the rest to the second...or third...or fourth.