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May 28, 2003 at 12:00 AM
Wow! The way you write the "love" scene is really incredible. A lot of really good points. You said the story was revised... I don't know what you did, but I didn't really like the beginning part. I felt like it needed a little bit more, like when they were on the phone... I couldn't really get what was going on, and the switching POV's kind of confused me too.
But other than that it's a great fic... great PWP and right on with staying true to character. I'd like to read more of this, maybe dive into a little more of Buffy's intentions and see why/how they ended up the way they did.
Keep up the good work
-Jane
But other than that it's a great fic... great PWP and right on with staying true to character. I'd like to read more of this, maybe dive into a little more of Buffy's intentions and see why/how they ended up the way they did.
Keep up the good work
-Jane
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May 14, 2003 at 12:00 AM
Nice little fic.
Very descriptive. Perhaps a little more pacing next time? I enjoyed it.
Very descriptive. Perhaps a little more pacing next time? I enjoyed it.