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hilarious! buffy passed out! it would be great if she needed stitches for it just because of spikey!great story!

HOLY HELL! He's the professor. Can't wait to see what happens when she regains consciousness. Love the story.

yay riley bashing! cant wait to see what happens next good job!

This story has 2 authors but it could alse a e a beta. I really could not get through the first chapter due to the gramatical mistakes and the poor sentence structure. You have a really good idea, it just needs to be fleshed out. Try looking at web sites that gives instructions to new writers as it may be helpful.

Dee: I am not the above reviewer you are referring to. However, you don?t have to be an English majr a r a writer to have grammar pet peeves. [Notice that it?s ?peeve?, not ?peave?.] Maybe you made an innocent typo. Then again, maybe the original reviewer did as well. My point? Spelling is very important, no question, but it?s tacky for a third part to jump in and disregard someone?s comment because of it.

As you say, if you are going to correct someone, it goes down a little better when you spell and punctuate correctly yourself, especially if the entire point of your comment is to point out someone?s spelling mistake. I don?t mean to insult you, but if you?re going to criticize someone?s lack of perfection, it?s best that you?re perfect yourself while you?re doing it.

Sorry for the off-topic intrusion. Carry on.

Hmmm

She was dating Riley but didn't sleep with him, I assumed she was a virgin because of it.....I guess she wasn't....I'm confused. Could use a beta, to help with the grammer and such and some of your sentences need more structure. I think youe a e a good story to tell, but could lose the readers interested on the details......Hope to read more and see where you are taking them after this little sex fest in the alley way.....


Kimber

Just a side note for anyone who cares and in case the above reviewer returns here. Grammar is spelled with two As and not with an A and an E. That is a real pet peave for many English majors and writers and so on. If you are going to correct someone it goes down a little better when you spell and punctuate it correctly yourself.

Dee

Kimber,
I'm spikesbabyblues, writing this fic under the name jo. if you read this, i appreciate your comments. However this is a tagteam fic. I write some and my friend writes some. She (Darla) is the beta for all of my stories, and i beta for her. So we beta the chapter the other writes. I'm not trying to be rude, just wanted to clear that up. But i do appreciate you taking the time to review and i will take on board what you have said. I hope you continue to read the story.

Whoa, you jumped into that fast! Lol. u could put a bit more detail into the scenes. But, this story is so awesome! update soon please :)

Cool story so far. Great idea, very original. Please update soon :)