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September 17, 2015 at 12:00 AM
Started in 2004, and last chp in 2005? Fifteen THOUSAND hits.... and only 12 reviews??!!??!! Ten Years its been.
I've been going backwards down through Sooo many stories these last couple weeks, all to find just what I might have had to say about someone's B/F drivel (at the time) or another's mini-epic between Angel(us)/Spike/Willow (which I don't ever recall really reading). Electra126, or kinetic-kid. Prophecy Girl, Oric13, or Dafmeister. Authors up one side and down the other of so many different: bizarro, sweeping, confused, weird... yet wonderful, sick, romantic, disturbed, joyful, disjointed, broken....
I'm back somewhere in page 80 or 90 something, and have found a few that indeed have words I did write in my review.
Because I Did read that story in question. Truly, though, I thought I HAD read this one, too. Let me fix that.
S7. Well, for us, things all started to go into left field when B:tVS went to UPN from the WB, which was S6. But the previews for S7 had rather a different slant painted, yes? Just because that did, did you have to squeeze your 1st chp the way you did?
Your chps 5 and 6 are finally showing better structure (and no, I don't mean you finally started to give us some real sex), and that bit of Anya and Xan in the kitchen {~ANYA : "And the counter"~} was fairly solid. Your progress as a writer shows its improvements clearly, and there is a few ideas that just BEG to be let out. Dawn/William of course comes to mind, but... Dawn/Ripper/William sounds like a serious sandwich! Dawn/Pr. Wood (because she got called to his office, and he does `Innocently` touch her hand, or something). That school being what it is, maybe they get a new girls Gym teacher???
I thought your Willow in 2 and 3 was rather `off` for the character. Please, the phrase "Dumb Ditzy Blonde" stuck with me.
This all needs a beta- in a good way, a better narration for how you saw that time in S7, and just who all was on hand, story-wise. Currently, I'd rate it a fair B-- (yes, 2 minuses), but just a little clean-up on 1 and 2, and you'd be a concrete B++ (maybe +++). Oh, and if I might beg for a chp 7... chp 8...chp 9. How 'bout we all just beg some more. Thanks.
I've been going backwards down through Sooo many stories these last couple weeks, all to find just what I might have had to say about someone's B/F drivel (at the time) or another's mini-epic between Angel(us)/Spike/Willow (which I don't ever recall really reading). Electra126, or kinetic-kid. Prophecy Girl, Oric13, or Dafmeister. Authors up one side and down the other of so many different: bizarro, sweeping, confused, weird... yet wonderful, sick, romantic, disturbed, joyful, disjointed, broken....
I'm back somewhere in page 80 or 90 something, and have found a few that indeed have words I did write in my review.
Because I Did read that story in question. Truly, though, I thought I HAD read this one, too. Let me fix that.
S7. Well, for us, things all started to go into left field when B:tVS went to UPN from the WB, which was S6. But the previews for S7 had rather a different slant painted, yes? Just because that did, did you have to squeeze your 1st chp the way you did?
Your chps 5 and 6 are finally showing better structure (and no, I don't mean you finally started to give us some real sex), and that bit of Anya and Xan in the kitchen {~ANYA : "And the counter"~} was fairly solid. Your progress as a writer shows its improvements clearly, and there is a few ideas that just BEG to be let out. Dawn/William of course comes to mind, but... Dawn/Ripper/William sounds like a serious sandwich! Dawn/Pr. Wood (because she got called to his office, and he does `Innocently` touch her hand, or something). That school being what it is, maybe they get a new girls Gym teacher???
I thought your Willow in 2 and 3 was rather `off` for the character. Please, the phrase "Dumb Ditzy Blonde" stuck with me.
This all needs a beta- in a good way, a better narration for how you saw that time in S7, and just who all was on hand, story-wise. Currently, I'd rate it a fair B-- (yes, 2 minuses), but just a little clean-up on 1 and 2, and you'd be a concrete B++ (maybe +++). Oh, and if I might beg for a chp 7... chp 8...chp 9. How 'bout we all just beg some more. Thanks.
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October 23, 2005 at 12:00 AM
ooooo i love this story, cant wait 2 see wat happens next..maybe a lil faith?
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February 6, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Damn, that was so erotic! You've got a great talent for writing, can't wait to see what happens when Xander joins!
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January 28, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Ah good, some Dawn/Xander goodness is coming =D I can't wait. My only complaint is with Dawn repetedly thinking feelings of a sexual nature for Xander were "icky", as they make numerous mentions of Dawn's suposedly long standing crush on Xander. This is later replaced with a her Spike crush, but im sure she still likes Xander. Speaking of Spike, i'd love to see Dawn "molest" Spike while he's chained up in the basement. That would be soo cool.
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September 14, 2004 at 12:00 AM
I'm thinking a definite NO on the Xander front...hello, female/female pairings only please. How about Anya n Dawn. It's one I haven't read before.
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September 12, 2004 at 12:00 AM
I really like this story so far and would love to see Dawn/Anya/Xander for the next chapter! Keep it up!
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September 12, 2004 at 12:00 AM
Excellent, but a little short. Make the sex scenes longer! I think Anya/Xander/Dawn would be great! And I would also like to see Willow/Kennedy/Dawn, that'd be hot! Keep up the good work!
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September 11, 2004 at 12:00 AM
Dawn and magic...dangerous combo! Great setup! Can't wait to see where it's going! Don't stop!
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September 10, 2004 at 12:00 AM
Damn! I'd like to be Chloe right now...
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September 10, 2004 at 12:00 AM
Oh yea, oh yea, uh-huh, that's what I'm talking about! Keep it up! I wanna see the girls gettin it on!