rate_review Reviews

Beautiful...Somehow, I think we ALL know what those eyes look like. What Heaven (or sweet Hell) to look in them every time. I enjoy your writing very much. Please continue...

i love buffy's sentual dominance over faith in this. just before the second part, before faith (obviously) passed out? the diologue is so smooth and flowing, and i'm eternally grateful that there was no dirty talk in this. dirty talk in fic makes me wanna cringe, because it never comes across like it's supposed to. the descriptiveness to the actions is simply perfect, and flows from one thing to another extreemly well, almost flawlessly. one thing though, when faith's getting rid of buffy's clothes? it's not very clear about how they're positioned, i couldn't work it out at all. i had to just use a position that could have worked, but i didn't really know if it was the right one. so i'd suggest clearing that little bit up slightly? cause it's not good to confuse your audience. other than that, i give you a rating of five for this. i truely enjoyed it.

ELR

I.....uh.....wow. Just....wow.

:)