AFF Fiction Portal
person Anon
schedule March 30, 2004 at 12:00 AM
It has possibilities, but you are in desperate need of a beta reader to catch spelling and punctuational
errors and to put the story into a more readable condition. Spaces between sentences and paragraphs would help a lot.

For instance, your title should have read like this: Hungry? Find A Distraction And It Will Pass...Maybe.

I see it's your first attempt, so keep going. Trial and error is how you'll learn.