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April 1, 2004 at 12:00 AM
Don't apologize for your writing, I love the quality of the story....we are seeing what is going on in their minds - the sporadic rough cut thinking is exactly what goes on in my mind....Most people's minds bounce around while they are processing wha goi going on in front of them....I think it is beautifully written. Don't read alot of m/m, but I check the section e day day since I started reading your story, so you have me hooked...Well done!
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March 31, 2004 at 12:00 AM
MORE PLEASE!! You don't wanna see me beg do ya? Cause I will! I just found this yesterday and when I saw it wasn't finished I whimpered and now there's more today and . . . . okay, calming myself, but still, MORE PLEASE!
(And, seriously, I wouldn't have known English wasn't your first language either, if you hadn't commented. You're doing wonderfully. You're going at a good pace without making it hurried and your characters are *so* good!)
(And, seriously, I wouldn't have known English wasn't your first language either, if you hadn't commented. You're doing wonderfully. You're going at a good pace without making it hurried and your characters are *so* good!)
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March 31, 2004 at 12:00 AM
i swear to God you were a roller coaster engineer in a previous life! sweet and sappy and heartwrenching! and not nearly long enough! and im sniffin here!
ta sweets....
kyri
ta sweets....
kyri
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March 31, 2004 at 12:00 AM
You're from Germany that's so cool. I'm taking German right now at school, it's tough.
So anyway, I love you're story, especially how you switch back and forth between the two point of views. You're writing is excellent, I can't wait to read more.
So anyway, I love you're story, especially how you switch back and forth between the two point of views. You're writing is excellent, I can't wait to read more.
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March 30, 2004 at 12:00 AM
You have some really fine story-telling going on. And no, I did not realize that English is not your native language until I noticed it in your Author's Note. I have seen plenty worse from American writers. Your use is really pretty good, but sometimes the spelling slips.
I am glad you mentioned it, though, because now I am not distracted by deploring the state of our educational system, as I do when the same mistakes are made by someone who has every reason to know better.
Where do you live? If this is an example of a second language, you would put most of us to shame wiht your native tongue, I'll bet! Please keep up the good work. I am truly enjoying your tale. My only complaint is having to wait for the next installment.
--Dee
I am glad you mentioned it, though, because now I am not distracted by deploring the state of our educational system, as I do when the same mistakes are made by someone who has every reason to know better.
Where do you live? If this is an example of a second language, you would put most of us to shame wiht your native tongue, I'll bet! Please keep up the good work. I am truly enjoying your tale. My only complaint is having to wait for the next installment.
--Dee
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March 30, 2004 at 12:00 AM
This story is really good! I think i got an idea for you summery. "Xander's parents kick him out of the house, and he moves in with Spike?"
Well anyway, great story, Keep writing, K?
BelleDraco)O+
Well anyway, great story, Keep writing, K?
BelleDraco)O+
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March 27, 2004 at 12:00 AM
mmmm! delicious! begging now! mmmmm....spike licks......pleading!
smoochies
kyri
smoochies
kyri
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March 26, 2004 at 12:00 AM
This story is so good. I can't wait for the next part. I hope you write more real soon.
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March 26, 2004 at 12:00 AM
Ch. 2 and 3
Oooo! So much fun! I love this story. I hope Spike finds Xander a good job. :D I'm going to continue to read this you know. :D
Mandylynn
Oooo! So much fun! I love this story. I hope Spike finds Xander a good job. :D I'm going to continue to read this you know. :D
Mandylynn
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March 26, 2004 at 12:00 AM
begging! begging much!!!!please oh please oh please!
kyri
kyri