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OK i'm interested, in fact very interested...give me more

You seem to have a very interesting story idea and I am really interested to see where you are going with it. I will really be excited if you don't take what seems to be the easy out that alot of ff writers take of just dismissing Riley as unimportant or abusing the character because that's not who Buffy oends up with. But... please please please get a beta reader or an editor. You have serious problems with tense and some sith syntax which take away from the story. However, your imagery is really good and your dialogue is as well from what I've read so far. Good Luck.

I will be interested to see where you take this. You have the basis for a great story.

Interesting. I hope you continue.