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January 21, 2004 at 12:00 AM
Hmm...
Kinda put off from it at first, but now I want to see where you take this.
Kinda put off from it at first, but now I want to see where you take this.
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January 21, 2004 at 12:00 AM
good editing job. you kept the same idea but made it a little more clear what was going on. cant wait for more if you decide to write it!
--ValidatedHatred
--ValidatedHatred
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January 21, 2004 at 12:00 AM
Well shit that wasn't nif Spf Spike at all. What an asshole! Maybe you could write another chapter showing he's not such a jerk.
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January 20, 2004 at 12:00 AM
this was a really good short story, i'm sure you could expand it into a great fiction...teen buffy allowing herself to be used by the much older spike...and spike been drawn to the tragic lonely teen...he's rich, she's poor...he's on the verge of divorce and she's on the verge of growing up...come on! there's loads there to work with...you can do it...you know you can...write more...you know you want to.
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January 19, 2004 at 12:00 AM
Hey, now! Don't be so hard on yourself, little trooper! I kinda like the fic's where Buffy get's all bashed down, put in her place, so to speak. BUT, if you REALLY wanna make us giggle? Write a sequel!:)
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January 19, 2004 at 12:00 AM
make it longer!
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January 19, 2004 at 12:00 AM
VEry impressive story, continuse the fiction. it will be interesting to fing out more about buffy and spike.
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January 19, 2004 at 12:00 AM
This story HAS potential. The only thing that sucked were the last 5 lines because they took all the positive emotions out of it and made it look cruel. But it can be fixed. Write more of the inner dialogue? I?d like to know what they think. And I?d really like to read more.
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January 19, 2004 at 12:00 AM
Its great, carry on ths fic.
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January 19, 2004 at 12:00 AM
i thought it was ok. i like the character change as buffy is always the one in charge and you have given her more of a willow type character, i like the change and think it is good. should be made into a fic. nice one.