schedule
January 12, 2004 at 12:00 AM
this story shows promise - a hot, forbidden affair... supressed passions... all good stuff. the spelling and grammatical mistakes are very distracting, though. perhaps find an editor to help catch mistakes.
schedule
January 12, 2004 at 12:00 AM
Okay, want more....wanted it yesterday....not last week......I take it Spike it the cheating slutbunny and is now wanting to cheat on Lily with Buffy......YOU hold your ground girl.......don't let him put in one inch.....make him beg beg beg and beg....before you let him any where near them black panties....and only after he has broken it off with Lily white artsy girl.......okay done with my rant...can't wait for chapter 3....
Kimber
Kimber